Descriptions of Space and Associations
Your main girl/guy is more important than you think. Entities are faster to picture when they are spatially close to the protagonist in the story. For those quick paced scenes, you want stuff to go down right next to your main guy rather than across the room.
It is also harder to picture the whole scene after the writer hones in on precise details on a smaller feature. Therefore it’s good to describe the whole place before settling in on your main targets. Honing in and then out may give the illusion that your story isn’t progressing forward.
It takes longer to focus on a negative description of an image than a positive. If you write the chipmunk isn’t riding a raccoon, I’m likely to picture a chipmunk on top of a racoon first before rejecting the image. That’s great if you want to drop a suggestion into your reader’s mind. This may seem like a pointless nugget of information, but you can still use it to strengthen your writing. If the chipmunk is missing, the stronger image may come from the description of the empty room rather than bluntly writing the point – the whole ‘show don’t tell’ bonanza.
Similarly, readers will picture what you say and the things associated with what you say (I know that’s obvious, just stick with me here). Words like ‘stripes’ cause activation of similar concepts represented in your mind such as ‘tigers’. This is useful when embedding themes and series of metaphors known as a semantic field. Similarly, badly worded similes and metaphors will create strange images. ‘The teacup was the size of a fist’ may be correct size-wise but the imagery is just bizarre. In this situation, the concepts are not connected and therefore the spread of activation in a reader’s brain for those concepts will be thinner, diffused, and is likely to cause a weaker image which is less memorable. Plus when you stray too far, the more likely a person will picture both entities separately and wonder why you’ve made such an odd pairing.
These tips are based on the way the brain works. There’s a good chance you will already be doing these things on an intuitive level, but I think it’s fascinating to know why they work as well as what they are. Plus, now you’re aware of these subtle effects, you can use them more effectively.
Just a note about little ol’ me: I have at least 2 interviews related to publishing and 4 exams for my Psychology degree to complete in May. Due to this exciting yet terrifying prospect, I may not get to post any articles in. As soon as my exams are over, I will most likely revert to my critique mode, taking on new clients and posting more articles than any other time of year. If all goes well, I may even be able to offer insider advice on the publishing business for all of you interested in more than just writing.
Cheers for all the support so far!